Kia Ora my name is kingi, i'm 12 years old and i am a year 8 student. This is my first blog post for 2021. We have been learning about personifications, metaphors,similes and adverbs. We had to watch a short movie and then write our own narrative on it. Here is my story.
Kia ora Kingi it's me Ngarui, I like you vocab and how it actually made me think I was the lady in this writing you writing came to life this is really good writing Kingi I also like how the background suites the narrative i just think that maybe if you change the color of the writing then it would be easier for people to. Read other than that it was realy good if you like you can came onto my blog it's https://kpsngaruiw.blogspot.com/ see you later🙂🙂 Ngarui
ReplyDeleteKia ora Kingi, I really loved reading your story and I thought your use of a simile to give us a picture of the lady smashing the vending machine was really cool. You have also used your punctuation really well, and paragraphing is on point with your ideas sequenced into each new paragraph. One thing I would change would be the lettering colours as they are hard to read on your background. Maybe a red or green colour might stand out more. Keep up the awesome writing and I look forward to reading some more during lockdown!
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